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Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer based subjects instead. Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this?

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Nowadays young modern learners are inclined to choose educational programs where they can use their electronic devices rather the traditional subjects. Whether
the
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modern technology-based programs of studies should replace traditional curricula is a constant question. Personally, I think that
computer
-based education has an excellent
future
.
Moreover
, studying technology is an essential part of modern life which gives student million of opportunities for their
future
 careers. At the outset, the traditional way of learning is fundamental, but the majority of modern companies demand their workers to have good
computer
 skills even in junior positions.
Furthermore
,
such
 technological giants as Google and Apple require specific and detailed knowledge of
computer
 science.
As a result
, youngsters are aware that programming skills
likewise
 general knowledge are essential and significant investments in their
future
 successful careers.
In addition
,
such
 famous names as Bill Gates and Steve Jobs motivate youth to pay more attention to
computer
 science at schools and universities. In a marked contrast we can see that if students don’t pay attention to
such
 traditional subjects as math or literature, it might make them imbalanced.
For instance
, if you don’t have a basic background in math you can’t progress in
computer
 science. In conclusion,
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technology requires businesses to use more technologies in their daily operations.
Thus
, students have to pay more attention to the subjects that studying to succeed in their
future
 careers.
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