The leaders of most organizations tend to be older people. However, some argue that younger people make better bosses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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To run an
organization
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good mental state and communication skills are a must, whether the person is young or old. some
people
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believe young leaders could be better for a
company
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. I partly agree with the view and present my thoughts in upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, In
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advanced ,era young
people
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are suitable for leading positions. To illustrate, for a
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according to
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time technological changes are needed for growth, which youth leaders could make possible because old
people
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often struggle to use technology.
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, the strict behaviour of an old boss in an
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lacks
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to
make
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build
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good relationships with employees, which makes young ones good candidates for
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position.
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, in
companies
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like Microsoft and Google, when young CEOs
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the command
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then
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the whole working criteria were changed and it was found that most of the employees were happy to be part of the
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.
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, for a long ,time old
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are holding a position in various
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. There are numerous reasons behind
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,
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, many times
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face stressful or worst economic situations where mostly old
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handle it calmly and hold employees together to stay with the
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.
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, the old boss in an
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has the ability to run a
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for a long time and the experience they have could take a
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towards success.
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,
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research in
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the majority of successful
companies
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have old
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who hold high positions in the
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.
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, in an
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organization
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organization,
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anyone could make a good leader, but it depends on their hard work or experience and communication as well. For a good ,boss it is necessary to stay updated with the latest information and they should focus more on employee satisfaction because
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growth depends on employee growth.
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task response
The introduction should clearly state the writer's position on the issue and outline the key points that will be discussed in the essay. The conclusion needs to summarize the main points and reiterate the writer's position.
coherence and cohesion
There is a lack of clear progression from one idea to the next, and some ideas are not developed in a cohesive manner. The use of linking words and phrases is limited, and there is a need for more varied and sophisticated cohesive devices.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • strategic decision-making
  • crisis management
  • innovative ideas
  • adaptable
  • tech-savvy
  • digital transformation
  • complex situations
  • high-pressure decisions
  • empathy
  • patience
  • strategic foresight
  • authoritative
  • collaborative work culture
  • dynamic
  • inclusive organizational culture
  • ageism
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