Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourist but not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract more local people to these museums?

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In recent years, the majority of
tourists
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visited
museums
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and historic
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while residents in these places rarely
visit
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. In
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less
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pay
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visit
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visitors
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we can do to attract more local
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to these heritage sites. The
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primary reason causes
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problem is the cost. In many
museums
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which
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the ticket is so expensive that they can not buy it, but
tourists
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who willing to pay for it because they want to learn about many
culture
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. The other reason
that
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the local
people
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seem to be familiar with their culture.
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, paying a
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to historical attractions
may be
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maybe
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waste
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a waste
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many
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any
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time and they feel it
boring
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.
Consequently
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, these
museums
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and historic relics are visited less by residents than
tourists
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. Because the
tourists
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who come to
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other countries want to broaden their
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and they may just have one chance to
visit
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. In order to attract more local
people
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visit
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, there
have
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some
way
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to
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.
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, the state should reduce slightly the cost for local
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or in school ,
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the teacher
a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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also
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organize
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after-hours activities for students to take part in
to
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so
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they can learn more knowledge about culture and history.
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, promote advertising about heritage
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sites
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through programs.
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, in Vietnam,
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has a program called 2 days 1 night.
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program has filmed heritage sites of Vietnam and
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by many celebs. And now thank
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this
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program, historical attractions in Vietnam attract many
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visitors
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even local
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. In conclusion, there have many reasons why
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case happens and have many solutions to solve. I hope that
museums
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and historical sites will be more visited by locals and
tourists
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in the future.
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