Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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Making money is much more essential than
job
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satisfaction. In my point of view, it is better for
people
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to care about enjoying their
work
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, and not about a high salary. (31) If
people
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do not want their life to turn into constant stress, they should be enjoyed
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their
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. Since doing
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of
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person’s
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a person’s
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own interest brings pleasure and a sense of satisfaction.
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, it gives
people
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a sense of
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that money can not guarantee.
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if someone
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earns a high salary but feels stressed and unhappy,
such
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a person cannot enjoy life.
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,
people
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who
work
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in a profession they are interested in are happier and more satisfied with both
work
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and life. (86)
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, working at a
favorite
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job
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keep
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motivated and
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leads to career promotion.
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, there is a strong relationship between
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satisfaction and productivity. Because a person who loves his
job
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can easily go into the field and achieve better results compared to those who
work
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only for
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salary. To give
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, famous k-pop idol Park Sunghoon left his career as a figure skater, which brought a lot of income, for his dream of becoming
famous
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a famous
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singer. He risked absolutely everything he had, but in the
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he fulfilled his dream and became a rich artist who enjoys his
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. (106)
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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