IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3.5

'There should be no legal age for drinking.' Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#age #support
The desired outcomes of preschool education (4-6 years old) are to reflect values, dispositions and skills emphasizing the whole development of the child to be a confident, self-directed, active contributor and a good citizen. The main expectation is to be a happy and healthy child who is able to communicate well with others.
Likewise
, encouraging them to share things and explore new things helps them develop a positive attitude and creativity.
For example
, teachers should explain to
children
 not to be afraid of making mistakes and guide them to find out solutions through their experience. It is
also
 essential to provide
children
 with activities that make them aware of healthy habits and show love to others.
For example
, the teacher assigns the
children
 to cook healthy food or to make cards for special days like mother’s day, teacher’s day etc in the dramatic play corner. As mentioned in Nurturing Early Learners (2010), early education should emphasize on knowledge-based curriculum which helps in forming the abilities of a child for lifelong learning. teachers play an important role as effective facilitators to build up the knowledge, confidence, language and social skills of the
children
.
Submitted by chawtheingi17 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: