Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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public

mind in the other way.

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some

people

found that advertising is nothing special as it is fundamental for selling goods to

customers

. It seems to me that it is the successful key for

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. Many

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on what they are going to buy,

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as specific brands, and specific things. They may not go to be affected by the advertisement even though the posters were seen everywhere. Another thing

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important is, while

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advertising is so common, they do not have the need in their life. The poster for advertisement purposes is always rich in

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and attractive words to catch

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people

's attention.

For example

, a discount promotion with a big red word font may let the

customers

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gives a relatively great chance for the company especially if they want to introduce the special functions of their goods,

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small company can be known by more

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big company. In conclusion, I believe that advertising shows an important role in the ways to sell

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things to

customers

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it may be very common as all brands have their own advertising, we can make it

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and creative

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customers

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
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repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
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