Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood, this should be the residents's responsibility; while others think, it shoud be the government's duty. What is your opinion?

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is often believe
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by a few
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of society that the
government
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to maintain a clean environment by keeping the paths between each property neat and ordered, while the rest of the people consider it is a selfish way to get benefit from the country, households should have
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their
areas
around look positive. I firmly dissent
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notion that
government
should be
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responsible
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for
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the public
street
. In my opinion, each person has the
responsibility
for
this
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and each housekeeper should take care of their
areas
in a
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descent
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way. To prove with, the fundamental reason why everyone has the
responsibility
for
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the area around them is
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the majority of the garbage were tended to
generated
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by the household within their living
areas
,
hence
, the issue
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mostly came from the residents and they could possibly avoid
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their
street
by act as a part of the city to reduce the bins and rubbish.
In contrast
, if the
government
is in charge of
this
order by law
then
it will lead to a large amount of garbage on the
street
without any chance to collect
them
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by
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the residents. Another point to consider is that the
government
officer
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may have a specific reason to create an order of taxation charge for keeping the
street
clean and tidy.
Moreover
, residents may not agree with the rule that the country is utilising the
responsibility
of
street
maintenance to receive higher payment rates in public service. In conclusion, maintaining a beautiful environment for either the resident or
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should be a
responsibility
for everyone who lives around the
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, but not the
government
. If the housekeeper
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willing to spend more money on
the
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public service
then
they could consider
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for help
to
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the
government
. Other than that I preferred to take the duty by everyone who could have a better
street
around their home when they pay more time and attention
on
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it.
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