Many people feel the urban encivronments are more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of the problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem ?

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It is undeniable that life in urban

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becoming more unhealthy year after year.

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issue is caused by both:

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overpopulation in megalopolis; and the excessive use of pollutive sources.

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, it is still possible to reverse that situation with correct government incentives.

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and foremost, it is important to understand the history behind it. With the beginning of industrialisation, in the 18th century, there was a change

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economic dynamics

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made workers migrate from rural to industrial areas seeking

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jobs. That was the trigger for the urbanisation process leading to a higher number of people

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a small portion of land. From

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on, we started

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a domino effect where in order to

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houses, green spaces were

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converted

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concrete

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concrete

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reducing the renovation of O2 and decreasing the air quality.

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, decades later, the superpoluted

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generated mobility issues and cars became a relevant component of modern life increasing even

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the atmosphere

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pollution

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pollution

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, in my

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, the main solution

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matter is to

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opportunities

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opportunities

and develop small towns

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smaller urban

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where there is still a possibility to

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maintaining

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maintaining

a balance between the number of buildings and nature.

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descentralization

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decentralization

is more possible than ever, because

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different

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different

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industrial jobs, our current situation does not require local presence. At the same time, there are other measures that could

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help

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to improve air quality,

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, by regulating the use of petrol as combustive and making

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accessible to buy

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electric

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electric

cars.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Many people feel the urban encivronments are more unhealthy than they have ever been What do you think are the main causes of the problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem ?

Fully explain your ideas

It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

What are the advantages and disadvantages while living in cities carry out them and give your opinion

Some people think it is a good idea to socialise with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it is important to keep working life completely separate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it