Studies show that many criminals have a low level of education. For this reason, people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate people in prison so they can get a job when leave prison. Do you agree or disagree?
Crime
rate is a matter of considerable public concern. There are several researches
to show that Change the wording
types of research
pieces of research
kinds of research
low
level of Correct article usage
a low
education
causes many criminals
. So people
think that the practical way
to reduce crime
is that criminals
should be educated to make sure they can find a job when they leave prison
. As far as I am concerned, I think educating criminals
is a good way
to reduce crime
to some extent.
On the one hand, education
can help criminals
find jobs. People
who have not
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tonot
acquire
more Wrong verb form
acquired
education
are harder to find a high-income or stable job than those people
who have a high level of education
. When they have no way
to make living, they are easier to become a criminal, like a thief. So these people
in prison
can be educated some
practical skills to make sure they can Change preposition
in some
good
at something in some fields, which can help them find Add a missing verb
be good
a
work in the job market when they leave Correct article usage
apply
prison
. It can reduce crime
especially reducing the people
who leave Correct quantifier usage
number of people
prison
try
again Fix the infinitive
to try
becoming
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to becoming
a
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apply
criminals’ rate
.
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criminals
On the other hand
, education
can ensure that criminals
know information from the outside world. Educating people
in prison
can make sure that they can follow the pace of society
. criminals
be
punished and stay Change the verb form
are
at
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in
the
Correct article usage
apply
prison
so that they have no way
to acquire information about development
of the world. Add an article
the development
Thus
, criminals
know news about other area
only Change the wording
another area
other areas
by
some regular ways. In Change preposition
in
china
, Change the capitalization
China
criminals
are permitted to watch TV, read books and have lectures about how to involve in society
at the prescribed time. Also
, they are educated to have a special skill
like fixing machines, making shoes and so on. These methods can make sure those Fix the agreement mistake
skills
criminals
knowing
information about other Wrong verb form
know
area
and Fix the agreement mistake
areas
easily
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easy
to
integrate into Fix the infinitive
apply
society
when they leave prison
.
All in all, educating criminals
to make sure they have practical skills to make living is a good way
to reduce crime
. Besides
, education
can make sure they can follow the
Correct article usage
apply
society
pace when they leave Change noun form
society's
prison
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