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The number of TV programs is growing.Some people say that it is good while others say it affects the quality of TV programs.Discuss both and give your opinion

#tv #programs #people #quality
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 in popularity, there is rapid growth in channels broadcasting
wide
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a wide
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 range of shows. A
number
 of
society
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societies
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 believe that increase in
such
 shows will provide people with a lot of options,
however
,a
number
 of others believe that it is degrading the quality of the shows.In my opinion, both
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perspectives have equal weightage. There are a
number
 of reasons why myriad people are happy with the increasing
number
 of TV serials. 
Firstly
, they have a lot of choices to
being
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be
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 entertained
such
 as serials, comedy shows, and that. They sometimes
getting
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 bored with the same program and
the
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advertisement. 
Therefore
, they choose to watch multiple shows at
a
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 same time.
Secondly
, when there are various shows,
then
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a plethora
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 of actors get income from that,
they
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and they
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 can
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use
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us
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use
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 these platforms to show their talent in front of
public
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the public
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. On the
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other hand
otherhand
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other hand
, those who
against
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are against
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the
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too many TV shows argue that many programs are
same
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the same
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 in the concept. The uniqueness of the program has been eliminated and
that is
 merely
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 waste of
the
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resources and money. To exemplify, there are  many dancing shows
which
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needs
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 various platform for
dancer
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the dancer
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.
However
, the theme is the same. So, there should
limit
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 shows for the individual domain. In conclusion, multiple programs
helps
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help
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 audiences as well as actors or genius.
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