Some students take a year off either to work or travel. What is better - traveling or working?

Some
students
take a year off either to
work
or
travel
. What is better -
traveling
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or working? I want to discuss both options. From my point of view both variants
good
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are good
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. Some
students
take a year off either to
work
because maybe they must
to
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make money in order to provide for
yourself
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themselves
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or
your
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their
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family, maybe they can get pleasure from
work
or
that
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at that
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time almost most quantity people buy an
IPHONE
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iPhone
, naturally and
thus
students
prefer working to buy an
IPHONE
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iPhone
.
For
instance
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my classmate Kamron, recently went to Russia to earn money and buy an
IPHONE
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iPhone
for himself, since all
this
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these
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friends use an
IPHONE
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iPhone
or maybe they prefer to
work
in order to in the future they have
a affordable
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affordable travel
a affordable journey
a affordable trip
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travel
. Some
students
take a year off either to
travel
because maybe they
so
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are so
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rich and they are able
prefer
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to prefer
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to
travel
, kindly if they so
wealth
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wealthy
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they have an
IPHONE
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iPhone
and they use
instagram
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Instagram
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or telegram like all young people and
thus
they
travel
around the world, maybe they want to rest with family, girlfriend, boyfriend or close friends in order to have a memorable experience or holiday destination.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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