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Some people believe it is a good idea for students to work part-time to ensure better opportunities in the future. Others are of the opinion, job during study distracts the individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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few
people
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 think that working
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part
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part-time
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time
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 for
students
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are
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 better chance of achievement in the
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. some
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part
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part-time
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time
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job
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study
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 distracts their minds.
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side and give suggestions as well.
to begin
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 believe that working
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
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 is
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breif
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brief
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firstly
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,I would like to outline the reason. it's
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 their young
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their
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 used to
work
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 hard and never
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relief
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 any body shoulder.
in other words
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,
students
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 are ready for the
difficult
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 which he definitely face in
their
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future
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that
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and
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part-time
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part
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time
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job
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make
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strong
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them strong
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 enough.
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, according to the
adults
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people
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 they
says
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 that you have to be used
doing
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to doing
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 hard
work
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 in your
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 due to
the
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inflation.
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,
people
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thinks
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think
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 that doing jobs while doing
study
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 can
also
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 help them out
to
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 money for their extra expense
such
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 as outing with friends and going
road
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 trips as well.
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, my cousin
who
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isn't that
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financial strong in their life so he's doing
online
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the online
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job
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 and taking all
expense
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expenses
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 out
from
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 it.
on the other hand
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,
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although
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 some
people
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 think that doing
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job
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the job
a job
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 while
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study
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studying
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 can't be tolerated because
disturb
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disturbs
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 all the
study
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.
kid
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 have to give more focus on their
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 because it was
there
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their
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 young
age
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 and
it
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age
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 of learning
thing
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. because they'll completely
education
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their education
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 can get
the
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job
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 easily. to illustrate, one of my close
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friends
freinds
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friends
 who's doing
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job
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the job
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 with
study
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an
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part
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part-time
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time
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 but his
study
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 to distract because he was unable to give to
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.
furthermore
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,
people
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also
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 believe that during
study
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part
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part-time
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time
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job
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 are so harmful
for
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 their
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future's
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future
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 .many of kid leave their
study
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 because of
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work load
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workload
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 and getting high salaries .
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, in
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 most of the
people
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students
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 doesn't complete their education because of
workload
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the workload
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 their shoulder. to sum up,
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 majority of
people
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 that
its
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it's
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 important for
students
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 to
work
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 from
teenagers
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teenage
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 life.other believe that any type of
job
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 will definitely distract their
mind set
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mindset
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 from
the
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study's
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studies
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. in my opinion, it
crucial
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 for
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 to
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 from
their
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an
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 early
age
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 so they used it and
also
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 make extra money for their
expense
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expenses
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.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable work experience
  • enhance their resume
  • academic qualifications
  • practical experience
  • time management
  • communication skills
  • problem-solving
  • financial stress
  • educational resources
  • job prospects
  • academic performance
  • mental and physical health
  • divided attention
  • extracurricular activities
  • overall development
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