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The number of multicultural cities is increasing due to globalisation. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

#cities #globalisation #development
The upgradation of cities is happening in the world due to hype in globalization. I Agree that there are more advantages compared to disadvantages.
First
, As the cities are increasing in the way
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the
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 look from before. It is giving more employment to the labour.
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, It is
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 giving new opportunities for different people.
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, Due to
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 everything became easier than before.
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 provides good facilities to the people living in that place.
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, Everything is now working on
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technology without the intervention of human activities Which made work tension free at
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. In conclusion, There are more advantages regarding employment, Facilities, and Work.
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