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It is important to give children the chance to act independently and make their own decisions from early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea?

#children #chance #act #decisions #age #idea
Nowadays,
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plenty of
children
 would like to live independently. It is significant that
kids
to
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be self-independent and solve their problems by themselves and do all things independently. I slightly agree with
this
 statement because of the following reasons. In
this
 competitive world,
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children
 want to be more autonomously and make their own decisions from
early
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 age by themselves. On the one hand, it is perfect that
kids
separately
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are separately
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, because in the world had happened everything and we do not know, what happened
with
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 us tomorrow
for example
, in
such
 cases being separate for a
child
 is good. Because if the
children
 lost
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 parents from early
ages
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 it will be difficult for them to recover and after
such
cases
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 the
kids
 should continue to live and take everything from life
also
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and also
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 make the main decisions in their life.
For instance
, the most simple thing the
child
have
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 to survive and work in their childhood. Even though the
kids
 have relatives,
it
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 will still become independently and make the from simple decisions to more
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.
On the other hand
, in order not to happen, it is necessary to monitor the
child
 and put him on the right path, because the
children
 may choose the wrong path with
wrong
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 people, due to the fact feeling free and thinking no one will know.
These day
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 we approximately
everyday
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 see
such
 things.
For example
, not keeping track of the
child
, he can do drugs or smoke. It is not even surprising to get into gambling. For
the
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 reason that
i
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 guess it is
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important
impostant
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important
 to monitor
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the child
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child
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children
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 and give them the right path
in
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their
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 early ages. To conclude, in
this
 world will be everything, to be ready for all cases. From my point of view,
all
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 depends on the person,
however
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 it is necessary to follow the
child
 and show him the right way, all the
same
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 to give the
child
 the opportunity to be independent and
mnitor
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monitor
 all of their actions.
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