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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Today, Humans are preferring self-
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work
 and they don’t like to have a manager and doing activities for other
people
.they like being their own manager. these days , Humans like to have their own
work
.they prefer to
work
 independently and it has some reason.
firstly
 , when
people
 have self-
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employment employment
, they have flexible Hours of
work
 and they can manage their time .
secondly
,
people
 who are starting their lovely job , have a strong motivation to try hard for improving their job situation.for
instead
, they are trying hard to extend their areas activity and earn more profits from their works.
finally
, when
people
 have their own
work
, they do have not any stress to get fired .
In addition
, humans are
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self-employment and have more freedom of action and sometimes they have more free time for their family.
Although
,
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work
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 some negative points
for example
, in
this
 type of
work
 all of the positive or negative results are the owner’s responsibility.so , they have to
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decide
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decide
to decide
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 careful and sometimes it is impossible. ,
Also
 It is possible that self-employment has not any profit for a period of time and maybe after ,that it is bankrupt because those
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 have not Strong financial support.so
people
 who like to start
this
 should be strong to fight problems. In conclusion, we find that why
people
 prefer doing self-employment.,
also
 we are saying negative points of
this
 type of
work
.we understand
people
 who want to have self-
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employment employment
 should be powerful to face problems.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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