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People often do not interact with their neighbours and this is harming community building. What are the possible causes and solutions?

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Present busy life situation, every individual are busy with their lives. which results in a lack of communication with the
neighbours
, there are some ways to be sociable in the neighbourhood.
This
 essay will examine the main causes of loss of sociability and possible solution for
this
 problem. In today's modern world people are very busy with their lives.
For example
, a person was doing a 9 to 5 job but he has to start at a minimum of 8am and after his work is done he will reach by 6 pm. On a daily ,basis they have very less space for their family,
moreover
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 they didn't have any
second
 to socialize with their
neighbours
. at least at weekends
also
 they are thinking about spending time with their family more over it affects the sociability of an individual. To overcome
this
 minute issue one has to spend some time interacting with one's neighbourhood and helping them with small things in their life. Often one has to go to social gatherings at often times to maintain a good relationship. Sharing festivals with the
neighbours
also
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 considered a wise thing to maintain progress for their well-being . Social interactions like attending
neighbours
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neighbours'
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 functions will be considered as the better way to know each other.
For example
, the government in Poland decide to forbid working on Sundays for all citizens.
As a result
, people spend their weeking with their families, go outside to try new activities and make new friends. In conclusion, Even though people are becoming more private, there is always a way to come back
this
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 situation if they try to.
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 it will make a great community by communicating with others.
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