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All education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
Many
people
 are believed that tuition
fee
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fees
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 and medical
cost
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costs
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 should be funded by the government and free for residents. I acquiesce in
this
 view because it brings a lot of
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beneficial
benefical
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benefits
 for everyone. In other woes, sponsoring will create more opportunities
to
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for
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underprivileged
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underprivilege
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underprivileged
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people
.
Firstly
, free tuition fee helps many children can go to school, so they will have enough basic knowledge.
Secondly
, diseases are developed all over the world which cost a higher fee, free hospital expenses will
helps
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 more
people
 to pull through some
damage
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 diseases. Residents do not worried about spending money
for
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on
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education
medication
edication
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education
nor
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or
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 hospital expenses.
Moreoever
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Moreover
, both education and healthcare are the
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mainly
maily
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main
factor
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 to improve the
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development
develope
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development
 of
country
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the country
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.
This
 way will survive many
people
 and children will have a
second
 chance to secure their
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future
fututre
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future
. For the most part,
although
this
 trend has received many
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opposites
opposite
opposides
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opposing
opinion
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, I believed that the
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phenomenon
phenonmenon
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phenomenon
 brings positive sides
such
 as free education and good health conditions.
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