In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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people still go hungry. There are many reasons why it

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goods on time. In my opinion, today many governments together with United Nations Organization try and do some necessary measures in order to

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decision. In conclusion, it can hardly be denied, that decreased hungry rate and

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Your opinion

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human use to what extent do you agree or disagree

Some people say that tourism has many negative effect on the countries that people travel to. How true is the statement ? What can tourists do to reduce the harmfulness of tourism on local cultures and enviroments? Give reasons for your answer and include any examples from your own experience.

In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

More developing countries are being given aid by international organizations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.