In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

Your opinion

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The only way to improve safety in our roads is to give stricter punishment for driving offenses. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Write about the following topic: Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It's thought by many people that the internet has caused people to become more isolated from society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.