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Some people believe that every human can create art. Other people think that art can only be created by people with special talents. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #art #talents
Nowadays a considerable number of young
people
 are trying to express themselves in an
art
 form. Many
people
 seem to think, that
art
 can only be created when one is born with certain
talent
. Some
on the other hand
 think that constructing
art
 is an activity for everyone who is willing. In
this
, essay both views will be discussed in detail.
First
 of all, there are
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 to prove that genes do influence the innate abilities of a person. When you see 2-
5 year olds
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5-year-olds
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 in reality shows like, '
Indeas
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Ideas
India's
 Got
Talent
' and 'Dance India', you are forced
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to
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yo
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to
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 believe that they have some inborn
talent
. They are gifted with that
talent
. They certainly have more natural aptitude than others in certain areas. Other well-known examples
also
 can be cited here. Who has not heard of the achievements of
people
 like Mozart and Einstein?
Secondly
,
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 side with those who feel that anyone can create pieces of
art
.
Art
, in my opinion, is to enjoy and to enlighten our lives.
Consequently
, as long as
people
 are having feen in
art
 activities, talents do not really matter in my view.
Moreover
, even if we do not have
talent
 or special skills by nature, we can always make efforts to acquire them and become better at doing it with full of passion as
people
 say practice makes perfect. To sum up, both
talent
 and hard work have a role in creating
art
. Both are
inextriably
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inextricably
 linked. The nature vs nurture debate has no clear-cut answer and will never have.
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