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Writing Samples
Band 4

The municipal corporation in the area where you live has decided to demolish a historical building to build a shopping center. Write a letter to the mayor of the corporation. In your letter: You have to explain why it is important to preserve the building suggest how the building can be used to benefit the local community.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to let you know that I am a resident of Mohan Nagar
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 area has many historical monuments .
Last
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 week , you
have
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given
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approval for the construction of a shopping centre. Which
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 is to be constructed on the land of Begum Mahal and for that remains of
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 historical building will be demolished by local authorities. It is my duty to let you know that locals are very disappointed with the decision taken by you because
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 historical place is an integral part of our culture
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 it is not justified to destroy it for the sake of the development of the city.
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 ancient site is two centuries old and is renowned for its architecture
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 tourists come from far places to visit it.
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 of removing
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 building for the shopping mall, you can allot some other land on the outskirts of the city. It would be a boon for the local community if you
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 come up with plans to make a few changes around
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 historical building in order to attract more visitors.
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, make provisions for some shops so that locals can earn their living by selling things.
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, the open space around Begum Mahal can be converted into a garden and a jogging track so that natives can use it.
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, making the parking lot near it would resolve traffic issues in
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 area. I hope you
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 consider these concerns of ours. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours
Faithfully
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structure
Break the writing into clear parts. Put one main idea in a short paragraph.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in grammar and punctuation. For example, use 'Last week you gave approval' and avoid odd phrases.
tone
Keep a formal tone all through the letter. Use the same name for the place and the same word for centre or mall.
coherence
Add more direct links to your points with simple words, like 'also' and 'for this reason'.
content
Make clear the plan to keep the site and show how it helps the town, not just ideas.
content
The letter shows care for the town and its history.
structure
It gives clear ideas for use of the place, like a garden and shops.
coherence
The letter uses steps like 'Firstly, Secondly, Lastly' to guide the reader.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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