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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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It has become increasingly popular for people to be
self employed
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,
instead
 of
comimeting
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committing
commenting
 to a company of
intitusion
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institution
inclusion
..there are several
reason
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 that can explain that among which
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flexible
flixable
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flexible
 working hours and decrease
work
 stress.
however
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this
 choice
also
have
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 its
drowbacks
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drawbacks
 including no regular salary
,
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and no special benefits.
such
 as paid holidays
To begin
 with ,it is very understandable why
self
 employing is
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becoming
becomeing
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becoming
 more and more common. and one major reason f
that is
 to achieve a
stress free
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 working environment for themselves .which they can hardly acquire working in a company. In
fact
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 statistics had shown an increasing number of
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work-related
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work related
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 illnesses.
In addition
 ,being
self employed
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self-employed
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give
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 the person the chance to
work
 whenever they want and whatever they are ,
For instance
 ,one can go on a
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vacation
vocation
vecation
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vacation
 and run some errands if they are willing to .
thus
 ,
its
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 is quite reasonable why some people opt to be
free lancers
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freelancers
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.
However
,
this
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decision
division
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decision
 while it can be
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beneficial
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beneficial
 to some .it
also
 carries
it
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 own advantages.
firstly
,there will be no regular salary .months can go by without
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payment .there
work
 depends largely on tasks that come upon demands .foe example ,
personeal
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personal
personnel
 that
work
 in catering ,there
work
 is seasonal .in
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,they
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well
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experience
experiance
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experience
 periods with high demands and
requsts
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requests
 as \well as periods of low demands and stagnation.another disadvantage is that companies often
provides
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its
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employees with some
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benefits
benfits
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benefits
such
 as health insurance and paid holidays and
this
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off course
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of course
 will not be a feature that
self
 employee
have
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. in conclusion,nowadays,
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freelancing
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free lancing
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 has become an
increasingly
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 adoption concept.
work- life
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 balance and a
stress free
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stress-free
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 environment are two major
reason
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reasons
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 for that.But
irriegular
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irregular
 salary and not having companies
benifits
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benefits
such
 as health
inssurance
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insurance
 might well be
disadvantegous
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disadvantageous
 to
those employee
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that employee
those employees
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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