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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of technology and transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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We live in an age when individuals are allowed to enjoy their life path and career in any spot of the globe, owing to the rapid improvement that transport means and technologies have been experiencing. Since there are always two sides
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 and cons of the statement to reach a reasonable conclusion. Undeniably, due to the ongoing achievements in the infrastructure and science areas, some people are given pleasurable choices and options concerning their preferable life and work conditions.
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, the scenario highly contributes to the emotional stability and mental health of the generation in general, as there are no significant restrictions and barriers, as well as negative pressure bound to
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 desired future picture, especially when only
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 is the limit. World citizens are
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borders,
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 their cultures and traditions,
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 relations between different nations,
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 on mutual trust and respect,
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, the trend extremely benefits
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knowledge exchange and
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diversity tolerance cultivation. Sufficient ecological issues shall serve as the solid opposition to the positive aspects listed above. Indeed,
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air and water pollutions are an inevitable result of the free-from-borders future with main transport means including planes, cars and ships.
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, while making
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 incredibly more convenient with every passing day, air crafts cause significant damage to the environment.
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 of a mature and self-conscious adult that treats a new place and its locals appropriately is seldomly the case, due to the increasing number of news reporting on arguments on an
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. Taking into consideration everything mentioned, I believe that the
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 perks, that come with some severe consequences to the planet or hold potential danger for international conflicts, should not be taken for granted: a high living level requires a high awareness, as the only possible way to reduce the negative impact.
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