Some people say that physical education classes are an important part of a child's education. Others believe that it is more important to focus on academics during school time. Discuss both these views and give your opinion?

Some argued that sports
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are crucial to offspring while others think it is better to learn and study other major
subjects
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but other major
lessons
improve our understanding way the real world work.
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essay will discuss both opinions and give its own opinion. While some believe that focusing more on physical education subject
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very crucial to children. Playing sports in physical education
class
help improve children's health.
For example
, many students who participated in their P.E
class
have better health and good mental
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strength
strenght
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strength
, because as they exercise their body
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chemicals that reduce anxiety we can see that many people who exercise live longer than others that didn’t exercise.
Thus
, physical education
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classes
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prolong our life and improve our
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healthy. The major
lessons
in school help us advance our knowledge. By teaching all the
subjects
that
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needed for applying
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subjects
in university.
For instance
, chemistry
class
teach students about chemicals and elements
this
experience help student who is looking to
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apply for
a job or university that required
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knowledge about
chimicals
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chemicals
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not only apply to chemistry subject but
also
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like business, astronomy, and biology classes.
Hence
, advance and improve our understanding so we can use
this
in the future. In conclusion, physical
subjects
help us stay fit and healthy and academic
lessons
help advance our understanding and prepare us for the real world.
Therefore
, both of these
subjects
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