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Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #industry #workers #individuals
One of the controversial questions in some industries nowadays is that should we replace old experienced
workers
 with young and inexperienced individuals. Particularly, it is
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not
 wise to do that, isn't it? In my opinion, I strongly agree and encourage these industries to employ more new young employees rather than
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.
Firstly
, we can not deny the
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indisputable
 fact that young
workers
 complete required tasks more effectively and productively than old ones in
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 allowed time. It
completely
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 because the young
at
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the
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present generation have
active
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an active
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 and creative
character
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 which is really useful for them in
competitive
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a competitive
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 company. Absolutely, all employers want to accept
workers
 who have these
standard
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standards
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such
 as Apple, Samsung, etc.
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,
every
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new young
workers
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worker
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 or even graduates
also
 need more opportunities to
work
 so that they can gain more experience in their life.
Secondly
, old
workers
 were not able to spend their entire life to
work
 for their company because of
the
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health problems.
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, because of
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bad health or even getting older, they have to take a break
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 one to two hours per shift, while the young could
work
 five to six hours straight without any break.
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,
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 policy nowadays has permitted old
workers
whom
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over
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are over
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fifty five
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years old to retire, and after they have started to retire, they would get their own pension. For that two reasons, the old should stop their
work
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anymore
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it anymore
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. In conclusion, I think because of the industries and companies'
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, they should replace the old with new young effective
workers
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • experienced
  • old workers
  • young
  • inexperienced
  • replace
  • industry
  • wise
  • argue
  • valuable
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • loss of expertise
  • lack
  • necessary
  • experience
  • maturity
  • diverse
  • workforce
  • mix
  • age groups
  • beneficial
  • focus
  • providing opportunities
  • continuous learning
  • development
  • balanced approach
  • smooth transition
  • maintain productivity
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