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Some people believe that research of medicines should be directly based on human trial. Is this the right way give your opinion and discuss its advantages and disadvantages.

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In recent days, one of the most discussed topics is getting practice with
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diseases diseases
. The majority of people think
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medicine
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 the right path
however
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contemporary contemporary
 humans argue that operating
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dead person is a terrible activity for humankind.
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this
 point of view and cutting off
this
 process. One fair reason why doctors tend to open human organisms is surgeons will get more practice
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 could give high experience.
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, adequate numerous of care for diseases discovered by opening the dead bodies. The crucial fact is that most types of beauty cosmetics and treatment remedies had to be based on alive skin because the prepared product
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examined
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the real torso would have much more good outcomes.
Moreover
 other camp reveals of benefits of trying to animals.
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 of saturating medicine departments with knowledge. On another hand
opening
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 a dead torso would destroy big humanity and moralism.
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, in Islam disruption of human health is Haram even person is dead. In
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 people are destined to live
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 welfare. Religion holds the view dead
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 must be well-preserved
this
 is a crucial law, even after death
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 must bury in good keeping. Testing medicines on live people is awful for psychology. In conclusion, nothing is eternal
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 means to kill
moreover
 leads to dangerous tests.
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