Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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