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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy in many countries. However, in some countries, alternative sources of energy are encouraged. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Fossil
fuels
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 are the major resource of
energy
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 in many Regions.
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, in some regions,
alternative
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sources
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 of
energy
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 are encouraged. In my opinion, finding
alternative
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energy
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resources
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 is better than using fossil
fuels
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 Because fossil
fuels
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 have a bad influence on the environment.
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 using
alternative
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energy
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 is positive.
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, Fossil
fuels
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 are
essential
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an essential
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 source of
energy
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 since 1990. Most
of
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apply
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the
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cars work with fossil
fuels
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. Using fossil
fuels
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 is very harmful
for
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 people's bodies and they have a devastating effect on nature. individuals have to find
alternative
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energy
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source
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sources
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. İt is a pressing need. Research conducted by CNN revealed that the Community has to promote
alternative
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energy
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resources
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are
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that are
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healthy
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a healthy
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 and long quality
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. İt is
very
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a very
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 positive impact because fossil
fuels
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 are destructive. Fossil
fuels
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 are not environmentally friendly but other
energy
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resources
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 are profitable. The crowd has to be aware of
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circumstances. One of the most sensible resolutions is encouraging people for starting new
alternative
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energy
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resources
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.
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, in my opinion, starting
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energy
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resources
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always
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 a big improvement because most
of
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apply
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the
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alternative
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sources
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 are renewable,
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, electricity and wind
energy
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 both of them renewable. renewable
energy
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resources
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 are limitless. They would not finish because individuals can produce them. Research conducted by CNBC revealed that starting
alternative
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resources
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 is
a
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 outstanding plan because
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community needs a
second
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 plan. If their fossil
fuels
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resources
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 finish they will start
alternative
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energy
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resources
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.
For example
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, I use fossil
fuels
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 but they consumed what should ı do
?
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.
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 I have to find
alternative
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resources
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. The crowd need to rely on other
resources
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 because if their current resource
finished
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are finished
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 they will be miserable. Starting
alternative
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sources
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have
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has
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 a positive effect on
the
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apply
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nature. İn conclusion, The community needs
alternative
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energy
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resources
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 for sustaining their life. I can not see any negative effect on starting other
energy
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sources
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.
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