Fossil fuels are the main source of energy in many countries. However, in some countries, alternative sources of energy are encouraged. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

Fossil
fuels
are the major resource of
energy
in many Regions.
However
, in some regions,
alternative
sources
of
energy
are encouraged. In my opinion, finding
alternative
energy
resources
is better than using fossil
fuels
Because fossil
fuels
have a bad influence on the environment.
Therefore
using
alternative
energy
is positive.
Firstly
, Fossil
fuels
are
essential
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an essential
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source of
energy
since 1990. Most
of
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the
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cars work with fossil
fuels
. Using fossil
fuels
is very harmful
for
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people's bodies and they have a devastating effect on nature. individuals have to find
alternative
energy
source
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sources
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. İt is a pressing need. Research conducted by CNN revealed that the Community has to promote
alternative
energy
resources
are
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that are
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healthy
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a healthy
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and long quality
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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. İt is
very
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positive impact because fossil
fuels
are destructive. Fossil
fuels
are not environmentally friendly but other
energy
resources
are profitable. The crowd has to be aware of
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circumstances. One of the most sensible resolutions is encouraging people for starting new
alternative
energy
resources
.
Secondly
, in my opinion, starting
alternative
energy
resources
always
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a big improvement because most
of
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the
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alternative
sources
are renewable,
for example
, electricity and wind
energy
both of them renewable. renewable
energy
resources
are limitless. They would not finish because individuals can produce them. Research conducted by CNBC revealed that starting
alternative
resources
is
a
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outstanding plan because
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the
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community needs a
second
plan. If their fossil
fuels
resources
finish they will start
alternative
energy
resources
.
For example
, I use fossil
fuels
but they consumed what should ı do
?
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.
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I have to find
alternative
resources
. The crowd need to rely on other
resources
because if their current resource
finished
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they will be miserable. Starting
alternative
sources
have
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has
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a positive effect on
the
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nature. İn conclusion, The community needs
alternative
energy
resources
for sustaining their life. I can not see any negative effect on starting other
energy
sources
.
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