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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy in many countries. However, in some countries, alternative sources of energy are encouraged. Do you think this is positive or negative development?

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Fossil
fuels
 are the major resource of
energy
 in many Regions.
However
, in some regions,
alternative
sources
 of
energy
 are encouraged. In my opinion, finding
alternative
energy
resources
 is better than using fossil
fuels
 Because fossil
fuels
 have a bad influence on the environment.
Therefore
 using
alternative
energy
 is positive.
Firstly
, Fossil
fuels
 are
essential
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an essential
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 source of
energy
 since 1990. Most
of
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the
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cars work with fossil
fuels
. Using fossil
fuels
 is very harmful
for
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 people's bodies and they have a devastating effect on nature. individuals have to find
alternative
energy
source
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. İt is a pressing need. Research conducted by CNN revealed that the Community has to promote
alternative
energy
resources
are
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that are
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healthy
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a healthy
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 and long quality
lifestyle
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. İt is
very
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a very
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 positive impact because fossil
fuels
 are destructive. Fossil
fuels
 are not environmentally friendly but other
energy
resources
 are profitable. The crowd has to be aware of
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circumstances. One of the most sensible resolutions is encouraging people for starting new
alternative
energy
resources
.
Secondly
, in my opinion, starting
alternative
energy
resources
always
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 a big improvement because most
of
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the
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alternative
sources
 are renewable,
for example
, electricity and wind
energy
 both of them renewable. renewable
energy
resources
 are limitless. They would not finish because individuals can produce them. Research conducted by CNBC revealed that starting
alternative
resources
 is
a
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 outstanding plan because
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the
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community needs a
second
 plan. If their fossil
fuels
resources
 finish they will start
alternative
energy
resources
.
For example
, I use fossil
fuels
 but they consumed what should ı do
?
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.
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 I have to find
alternative
resources
. The crowd need to rely on other
resources
 because if their current resource
finished
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are finished
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 they will be miserable. Starting
alternative
sources
have
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has
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 a positive effect on
the
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nature. İn conclusion, The community needs
alternative
energy
resources
 for sustaining their life. I can not see any negative effect on starting other
energy
sources
.
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