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Scientists have been warning for many years that to protect the environment, we have to limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warning many people do not pay attention to this. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to save the environment?

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Scientists believe that territory has been protected as human beings have to limit the use of
energy
 in their daily routines for the latest year by individuals.
However
, most
of
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people
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in
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despite
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warnings. In my opinion, humanity
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 t aware of destroying nature as they do not be careful to save the habitat. There are many reasons that do not pay regard to
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 explanations, and there are many ways to how can
to
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people
 be encouraged to save the domain. The main reason
that is
people
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 not conscious of the breakdown environment caused by climate change and global warming. Climate change and global warming's influence has increased on the earth which we live
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day by day.
Also
, the usage of
energy
 does not limit because
people
 do not know exactly what happened cause of pollution.
Firstly
, the government should give education about the rate of usage of natural resources and the negative
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impacts.
Besides
, every government reveal the law about the boundary of utilising
energy
. So
people
 can gain awareness. Another important reason
that is
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 the limitless use of
energy
, company where is in all over the world pour down their waste
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 the sea or mixed to the soil. It is really dangerous to humanity.
On the other hand
, it is the most reason for environmental pollution. Companies are persons
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 punished by law, provided that they do not respect
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law. To sum up, Everybody should be encouraged to conserve the territory as they are provided training for dangerous about to raise environmental awareness.
Hence
, I believe that they are to pay attention to the scientist's injunction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy-efficient appliances
  • renewable energy
  • conservation measures
  • sustainability campaigns
  • climate change
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • tax rebates
  • green technology
  • eco-friendly habits
  • government legislation
  • sustainable living
  • renewable resources
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