Some people think that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or a health club, while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is sufficient.

In the contemporary world because of the courses,
job
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, school and other
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there is quite a mixed variation of people who
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not
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. According to
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people’s mind that the best way to stay fit is to join a
gym
or a health club
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doing everyday activities will be explained widely.
First
of
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doing everyday activities
such
as walking and climbing stairs are not effective. The reason for
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people can forget about it.
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the citizens have less time.
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fit everyone needs schedule and control due to progress. Reaching
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achievements
achievement
achievemnets
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achievements
without progress is impossible.
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, to illustrate I would like to tell about Cristiano Ronaldo. The secret of his staying fit at 37 is
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a sport
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. As a matter of
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all his
job
describes
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training and games. In comparison with
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sportsmen
the citizen’s
job
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connected with sport. It is undeniable fact that only joining a
gym
or a health club is the way to stay fit.
To
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my
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everyone should visit the
gym
. Because specified time to training in the
gym
always shows results.
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gyms include different exercises. In
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I would like to say that nowadays only visits to
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and health club can help to stay fit.
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everyone is busy
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their
job
. Specifying some hours
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trainings
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is a good way to stay fit. The main point is to create
suitable
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schedule every day.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cardiovascular health
  • resistance training
  • physical endurance
  • muscle tone
  • caloric expenditure
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivational factor
  • fitness regimen
  • holistic health
  • sustainable exercise habit
  • metabolic rate
  • physical exertion
  • exercise consistency
  • health maintenance
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