Many countries spend a lot of money in art. Some people think investment in art is necessary, but others say money is better spent on public services and facilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the current scenario, The management of technology is constantly on the rise.
For instance
, social
website
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like Facebook, WhatsApp, Linked in, etc. Which has had an adverse impact on one's individuality as well as on Society. I support
this
statement which states that social
site
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had a false impact on people. Analyzing the advantages and limitations of a networking site will prove
this
. To commence with, there are several reasons to
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fact.
Firstly
, the usage of
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apps
such
as Facebook, tinder, WhatsApp, Linked in, etc. Are one of the reasons for
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gap between families.
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, In the past, society had time to spend with their parents while
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due to the foundation of
apps
Large number had become obsessed with these
apps
, especially
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teenagers.
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, laziness is one of
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adverse
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of networking
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, loneliness, depression, etc.
Therefore
, due
these modern
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automation
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it is common to see parents spending more time with their cell
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with their children.
On the other hand
, despite all these
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It has its own advantages
such
as finding
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community, awareness about the things that are happening around your surroundings, getting
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for trying different foods and so on.
For instance
, with the help of these
technologies
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it is easy to find childhood friends,
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about new things,
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with people who are far away from you. In the
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the
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social website has
its
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beneficial and adverse
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which can be minimized by taking certain measures.
For example
, Keeping a time limit on using these
apps
, Taking part in extracurricular activities,
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equal importance to family members and communal sites.
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, it is common for
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to maintain a balance by managing the use of socializing
apps
. In the end, I would
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conclude by saying that spending more hours on socializing sites will lead to laziness, loneliness, depression etc.
Therefore
, it is necessary for society to maintain
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in the management of technologies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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