In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

Nowadays, the amount of

crime

is increasing in many countries.

This

is one important problem that lots of nations have to face and resolve. In my opinion, the

first

reason is

economical

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the economical

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situation, the

second

reason is technology

developing

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development

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. With technology developing, more and more

games

and

movies

are increased including

crime

games

. The

games

are made clearly and truthfully. So

that

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people

often confuse that it is real or not.

For example

, SONY company created the game box PS5 which is famous and popular

in

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the

world

. There are lots of

crime

and action

games

inside it. At the same time,

crime

movie

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movies

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are

also

raising all over the

world

. Plenty of young

people

like to imitate the role

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of who

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who

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those

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living in

the

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games

or

movies

. They don’t know right from wrong.

Therefore

, they often make

crime

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.

Secondly

,

people

who are living in

this

world

has full of competition and pressure. Some

people

just want to get money

through

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by

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treating other

people

instead

of working hard.

Such

as lots of elders lost their money due to financial

crime

. To resolve these problems,

the

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governments should limit youth

people

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people's

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use

some

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of some

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websites or Apps, especially some

movies

and

games

.

For example

, some western countries have already made

different

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the different

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grade

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grades

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for films so that some

movies

that young

people

cannot watch. At the same time, the governments, the schools and parents should educate

to

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the youth

people

together.

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people

need to know what they can do and what is limited.

In addition

, the government need to create fair economical competition for all the

people

to avoid financial crimes. In conclusion,

although

to avoid

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avoiding

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and

solve

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solving

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crime

is

difficult

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a difficult

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job,

but

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we should try our best to do it, not only for ourselves

,

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but

also

for

all

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the

world

in the future.