Childhood obesity is a serious problem globally. What are the causes and effects and how can the problem be tackled?

There are two main causes of
obesity
amongst
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children. The
first
one is
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sedentary
sedantary
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lifestyle which is very common nowadays. Because of
various
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modes of digital entertainment available during
the
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childhood,
the
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physical activity has significantly decreased.
Therefore
, the fat content from the consumed food gets stored within the body resulting in
obesity
. Another reason is unhealthy eating and the real culprit for
such
habit is the fast food culture.
This
quick service
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food generally has high fat, salt or sugar content which
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more calories will get consumed with less nutritional value. These extra calories, along with
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sedentary
sedantry
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lifestyle
acts
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as
a
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fuel
toward
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obesity
. The problem,
however
, seems huge,
it
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can be tackled by making small changes in children's
routine
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. They should be encouraged to participate more in physical activities which will
subsequently
result in
buring
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burning
more calories.
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,
for instance
, who are involved in any kind of sports are found to be fit, irrespective of their eating habits. If
this
problem is not resolved in
timely
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manner,
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childhood
obesity
may result in
long term
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issues like diabetes.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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