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more and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficule. explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. how can governments make urban life better for everyone

#people #cities #search #life #city #difficule #difficulties #governments
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Cities
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 are often seen as places of
opportunitybut
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opportunity but
 there are
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 some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis.In my opinion,governments could do much more to improve
city
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 life for the average inhabitant. The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large
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city is
cityis
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city is
 that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village.Inhabitants of
cities
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 have to pay higher prices for housing,
transportand
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transport and
 even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems
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 as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas.
Furthermorethe
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Furthermore the
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 air
auality
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quality
 in
cities
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 is often
poordue
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poor due
 to pollution from traffic and the streets and public transport systems are usually
overcrowdedAs
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overcrowded
overcrowded as
 a result
city
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 life can be unhealthy and stressful
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However
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 there are various steps that
aoverments
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governments
government
 could take to tackle these problems
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, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondlypoliticians have the power to ban vehicles from
city
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 centres and promote the use of cleaner public
transportwhich
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transport which
 would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In
Londonfor
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London for
London
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example the
examplethe
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example the
 introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic
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problem
problems
problemA
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problem
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 option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry
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and jobs
andjobs
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and jobs
 to
thoseregionsin
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those regions in
 order to reduce the pressure on major
cities
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 In conclusion,governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all
city
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 residents.
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