Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A few
people
have rather do every type of
activities
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and they want to their
life
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living
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condition
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in
cooler
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a cooler
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environment, while others
preferring
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to do these things in warm weather. In my opinion,
way
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of
live
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and
to do
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every
activities
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would be better in the cool
nature
.
People
who want to do any action in cold weather have some advantages of
this
situation. They might have some kind of enjoyable time, and
this
might be
good
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pastime after
this
condition may
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effect
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people
’s mood and  health
by
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the positive side.
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,   a myriad number of elderly
people
has
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been going to sanatoriums where they
located
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in
the
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cooler spot and
this
places environment healing
good
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their health
or
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even better than ever . If humans go to
the
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cold
nature
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places more than not to do some kind of
activities
 after their
times
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might be better and even they may not know how their time
passing
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.                                      
On the other hand
, most
people
’s preferable choice
are
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warmer environment. Because, doing
activities
in the hot weather may be more enjoyable for
people
and they can continue long-time doing these
activities
without any exhaust, for
this
reason
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if humans do
the
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any kind of physical work or activity in the hot
nature
and
this
cannot exhaust them. A good example is that my brother always went
to
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the
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swimming
in
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the
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hot summer days  with themselves friends and never told
about
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him about
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himself  tired or not. To conclude,
although
there are more benefits of doing activity and
way
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a way
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of life in the warmer
nature
,
but
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I feel that
living
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condition
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of the
people
who are living in the cooler place can be enjoyable.
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