Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A few
people
have rather do every type of activities
and they want to their Fix the agreement mistake
activity
life
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living
condition
in Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
cooler
environment, while others Add an article
a cooler
preferring
to do these things in warm weather. In my opinion, Wrong verb form
prefer
way
of Correct article usage
the way
live
and Replace the word
life
to do
every Change the verb form
doing
activities
would be better in the cool Change to a singular noun
activity
nature
.
People
who want to do any action in cold weather have some advantages of this
situation. They might have some kind of enjoyable time, and this
might be good
pastime after Correct article usage
a good
this
condition may Correct your spelling
affect
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
people
’s mood and health by
the positive side. Change preposition
on
For example
, a myriad number of elderly people
has
been going to sanatoriums where they Correct subject-verb agreement
have
located
in Add a missing verb
are located
the
cooler spot and Correct article usage
apply
this
places environment healing good
their health Change the adjective
well
or
even better than ever . If humans go to Correct word choice
apply
the
cold Correct article usage
apply
nature
places more than not to do some kind of Replace the word
natural
activities
after their times
might be better and even they may not know how their time Fix the agreement mistake
time
passing
. Wrong verb form
passes
On the other hand
, most people
’s preferable choice are
warmer environment. Because, doing Change the verb form
is
activities
in the hot weather may be more enjoyable for people
and they can continue long-time doing these activities
without any exhaust, for this
reason
if humans do Add the comma(s)
,reason
the
any kind of physical work or activity in the hot Remove the article
apply
nature
and this
cannot exhaust them. A good example is that my brother always went to
Change preposition
apply
the
swimming Correct article usage
apply
in
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on
the
hot summer days with themselves friends and never told Correct article usage
apply
about
himself tired or not.
To conclude, Correct pronoun usage
him about
although
there are more benefits of doing activity and way
of life in the warmer Correct article usage
a way
nature
, but
I feel that Remove the conjunction
apply
living
Correct article usage
the living
condition
of the Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
people
who are living in the cooler place can be enjoyable.Submitted by Premium Version on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
