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Topic 1 : university should accept equal numbers of female and male students in every subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, higher
education
 plays a fundamental role in terms of opportunities for new generations. Some people argue that universities should accept equal numbers of students for
both
 genders in their
courses
. I completely agree with
this
 idea and in
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 I will explain it. Admittedly, our society is luckier than the previous generations, due to the fact that today
education
 is much more available to everyone. Guarantee equal opportunity for females and males to attend a specific course is at the base of a democratic society. By doing that, universities can give the same opportunity to
both
 sexes to start a career or follow what they are passionate about.
For instance
, in the past, in Italy, not only higher
education
,
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 but
also
 primary
education
 was separated among boys and girls.
In addition
 to that, by opening their
courses
 equally to
both
 genders, the higher
education
 system can send a message all over the world, because not all societies allow their female population to receive
education
, especially in the Muslim world.
On the other hand
, universities have the big opportunity to show the world that each human being can attend all the
courses
 available and even better, everyone can succeed in them. To conclude, I strongly believe that all higher
education
courses
 should be open equally to
both
 sexes, without distinctions. It is not possible to establish if a male deserves more to attend a course than a female or the opposite.
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