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Band 5.5

Explain the positive and negative aspects of international tourism.

Nowadays, the majority of people are
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 about the environment. The arrival of foreign
tourists
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 is one of the major problems.
On the other hand
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, there are many advantages of
tourism
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 as well.
This
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 essay will explain both pros and cons of the arrival of foreign
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.
Firstly
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, the benefits of foreign
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 have many advantages
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 the country. Foreign
tourism
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 can generate revenue for the country’s economy, as well as export agricultural products and manufacturing vehicle parts. An advantage can refer to the increase in wealth and quality of life for local people in rural
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.
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, foreign
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 who visit a rural area will create a high potential to stimulate local economic growth and job creation rate.
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,
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also
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 has the advantage of restoring historic sites and cultures.
However
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, foreign
tourism
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 can lead to some negative impacts, that are caused in most cases, the tourist destination always being popular in the same
areas
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.
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, Bangkok, Tokyo, Paris, and New York. These are an example of popular tourist spots. The capacity for
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 in these
areas
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 may cause more pollution and destroy the natural environment.
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,
tourism
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 can raise property prices near popular
areas
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, which will make locals migrate from the cities and gain more non-local populations in these
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, which contributes to economic leakage. In conclusion, foreign
tourists
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 consider both advantages and disadvantages for the country. These can be prevented by policies and regulations from the government for controlling natural environments, pollution, and non-local populations.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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