Some of today's schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be an advantage to studnets' education or would it be an unnecessary complication?

In recent days, a few
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institutions encourage
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students
must have to bring their
laptops
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the lectures, which learning the concepts because it would be efficient for them in their courses.
Nevertheless
, it has some positive views, I am of the opinion that the downside will overtake its upside. My preference is explained with coherent examples in the forthcoming paragraphs. The foremost reason for my notion is that
laptops
and other electronic devices would become
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distraction
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for
students
. Nowadays the youth has inclined and obsessed with
such
types of
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gadgets
budgets
.
This
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hence
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decrease in their academic scores.
For instance
, if
students
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personal
laptops
,
then
it might hamper their concentration skills
thus
, creating a weak and
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system. To add to
this
,
students
would feel
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complex as not all the
students
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brand of units with similar functionality. The schools have a number of
students
coming from various financial backgrounds.
Therefore
, while sitting in the same class they may compare themselves with others and
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an unfair environment. The government of Delhi has
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announced
annouced
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announced
the law '
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banning
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baning
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all
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of phones and
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in schools, which is an apt example of
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.
On the other hand
, the advantages
this
proposal would bring can not be disregarded. It would assist pupils to gain in-depth knowledge of the subject. Pupils could easily search the topics by entering
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keyword
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and will get a plethora of
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, which would drastically
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mastery. All in all,
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although
though
athough
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although
, some education centres support the belief that
students
should use their computers to help them to assist, I will vote against
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matter.
This
is to say that it could separate the pupils and build a chaotic atmosphere.
Moreover
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room for the
students
to ask questions and queries to their educators, thereby no need for any equipment to check with.
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