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The gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

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The bar chart shows information about the spending of weekly
income
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 of
families
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 in one country in 1968 and 2018. Overall, In the year 1968
families
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 spent more
income
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 on
food
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 and the very least percentage of their
earnings
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 on fuel and power.
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, in 2018 more money is spent on leisure activities and less amount was spent on fuel and power. Looking at the details, in 1968
families
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 spent around 35% of their
income
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 on
food
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. About 10% of their
earnings
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 are going towards clothing and footwear and housing. They spent almost the same percentage of their
income
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 on each remaining item that include household
goods
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, personal
goods
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, transport, and leisure. While
income
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 spent on fuel and power was very marginal and
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 only around 6%.
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, in 2018
amount
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 spent on
food
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, clothing and personal
goods
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decreased by almost 50% and
families
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 only spent around 17% on
food
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, about 5% on clothing and
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approximately
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approximately
 4% on personal
goods
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.
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, in 2018 major percentage of their
earnings
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 (around 22%) was spent on leisure activities. After that, about 19% and 17% of their
income
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 was going towards housing and
food
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 respectively.
Income
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 spent on transport was about 14% and the rest of their
earnings
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 are spent on each remaining item with little fluctuation of percentages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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