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Leaders and directors in an organisation are normally older people. Some people think younger leaders would be better. Do you agree or disagree?

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younger
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their country.
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disagree
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disagree
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 because many of the older can give benefit
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 them. To sum up, The vast majority of
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. But others think that younger can be better than adult one's due to their having that
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