Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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along with staying in the same
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career, and moving from one industry to another. We will discuss both
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views in the below essay with some statistics that can provide conclusions to my view.
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field can develop
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basis, A Perfect example
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is: Satya Nadella, (C.E.O of Microsoft) is stated that his success story is solely dependent on how he persuaded his life within the
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which leads to his personal development along with the development of
company
parallelly . We can see through his life, that no matter where we
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if we put in the
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we will be heard down the line.
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own perks and they will learn how to
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to the new culture every time they change the
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can build them a stronger
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, professionally and personally.
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; Stephan Winkelmann (C.E.O of Bugatti & Lamborghini)
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worked in a number of
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and made his mark
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he transformed his life from one
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either of the brands at the same time,
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that we can understand that global
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can only possible if move around where you the task itself can challenge you. In summary, A person can only learn so far until he sees himself in it, In
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two successful people who made a mark in the fortune 500. In my opinion, in both cases, we can see that they pursued
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own pattern of achievement which makes them successful in
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own way.
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  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
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  • Job security
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