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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The line graph illustrates the number of populations moving from
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 to metropolitan cities in Iran, Indonesia, and Russia between 2000 and 2025.

 Overall, the amount of moving people in
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 three countries exhibited upward trends.
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, Iranian came in
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 at the beginning, whereas it is expected to overtake other nations and have the largest number at the end of the period. In 2000, the movement in Indonesia was only 10
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, after going up gradually to three times in 2020,
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 figure will be predicted to remain the same at 30
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 people by 2025. It is worth noting that
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Russian
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Russia
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 took the lead at around 15
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 in 2000, it
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 by Iran after 2020, and predictions for less than 90
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 people in 2025, ranked
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 50
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 citizens in 2015,
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 reached
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 peak at over 90
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 after 10 years.
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