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1. The
Azerbaijan
 territory diverged into several Khanates which are, afterwards, conquered by the Russian empire.
Moreover
, the Russian empire divides
Azerbaijan
 into two parts after the Turkmenchay treaty which was signed between Russia and Iran in 1828: Northern
Azerbaijan
 and Southern
Azerbaijan
. On the one hand, Northern
Azerbaijan
 is under the control of the Russian empire and named Caucasian
Azerbaijan
;
on the other hand
, Southern
Azerbaijan
 is called Persian
Azerbaijan
. 2. Actually, some archaeological findings show the Azerbaijanis were local inhabitants of the Caucasus.
For example
, the Azykh cave discovered by Mammadali Huseynov proves that the Azerbaijani ancient population dwelled in the territories of Caucasus.
Furthermore
, the breakthrough of homosapiens was found in
Azerbaijan
 and visual observations assert that they
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belonged to the Caspian race. 3.  The Azerbaijani history and literature are subject to be falsified over the period of the Soviet Era.
Moreover
,
Azerbaijan
 historians faced solemn problems.
For example
, some Azerbaijani historians have become more hesitant to shed the artificial history written in the Soviet era due to the fact that of they are literally worried about Russia.
In addition
, the Soviets forcefully made the Azerbaijanis stay far from Turkic-originated nations.
Furthermore
, they made an absurd concept which does not relevant to the truth “Brotherhood” of Azerbaijanis with Georgians and Armenians by claiming that they are common ancestors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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