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Drug addiction has become enormous problem world wide. why this is happening and give solutions.

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Globally,in search of pleasure,people have easily adopted drugs.
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,the consequences of drug addiction are enormous in day-to-day life.In
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 essay,I will elucidate its cause and provide a solution.
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 with,Many crowds combat their lives with stress.
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 is due to the pressure in their employment,financial constraints and failed marriages,
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 unemployment is one of the major reasons for stress.
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, communities with major ill-fated diseases and loneliness fight depression.To overcome all these factors families choose to have relief in form of any material substances,which in turn gets them addicted to remedy.
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,an individual who consumes cures in any form will forget everything and they can be a serious threat to humanity.
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 problem can be resolved by teaching specific relaxation techniques to an individual and the government can conduct yoga sessions across the country to overcome depression.
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 contemporary era, prescriptions can be easily purchased by anyone who owns a certain amount of money,
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,pill retailers across the globe have targeted youngsters and communities who easily get addicted to pharmaceuticals.
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,they sell most of their pharmaceutical near educational institutions which were easily purchased by the public.To add
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,In most of the in-house parties, poison plays a vital role in pleasure.
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,there is a chance of disputes among the person.To eradicate these consequences,the government needs to take the necessary steps to prevent stimulants from circulating among people.
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,they need to tighten their security and do random checks across the nation.In
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 way,we can stop medicine addiction among human beings. To conclude,the government should take necessary steps to combat narcotic addiction,
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 it is the responsibility of the man too.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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