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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe that money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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There are a few regions where individuals feel that it is important to spend a large amount of cash to build new railway machinery to improve train speed so they can travel faster between cities. While there are other people that have their opinion that these funds could be better spent on making the existing public transportation better. In
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 essay, I will write about why purchasing newer train lines could save
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 and how they could save more capital by upgrading
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 they already possess as well as include my own opinion.
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 of all, if more cities were to invest wealth into their railways it would make the distance shorter for their travellers since the
trains
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 would be able to drive faster and save
time
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. By upgrading the rail lines, they would be able to
transport
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 quicker
trains
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 which would lead to customers being transported in less
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 frame.
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, Sweden and Norway decided to upgrade their train railways and since
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 it has improved their
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 by 85% when it came to travel distance.
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, these countries will better save their limited budget if they improve their existing public
transport
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. Maintaining and upgrading
trains
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 that already exist would improve what they already own, and they would spend less
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.
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, Australia has chosen to upgrade their existing
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 and the outcome was that the
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 spent was 50% less than what Sweden and Norway spent on their public
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. In conclusion, if countries spent more funds to improve rail lines it would save
time
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 since faster
trains
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 would be able to be used. At the same ,
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 countries would save more
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 by improving their existing ones. I believe that it is better to spend
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 on upgrading
trains
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 that are already in use since it will cut costs which could be used elsewhere.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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