It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

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Generally, it is opined that females are the best fit for parenting. I am truly convinced by

this

statement which I have depicted in

this

essay.

To begin

with, it is found that

mom's

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moms

mom

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are passionate

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storytellers

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story tellers

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storytellers

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and singers. But how does it impact

during

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apply

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babysitting? Because there is a way in which a child should be raised the little one might be naughty at certain times when it comes to meals

however

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, their senses will be wide open since

majority

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the majority

a majority

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of feminine voice is melodious it can make

baby

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the baby

a baby

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stop crying and compleat the meal.

For example

, I have seen my

neighbour

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neighbour's

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kid being adamant

for

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about

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dinner when dad takes care of him

nevertheless

, when it comes to

mom

he is

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usually

usualy

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usually

compost.

On the other hand

, since restricting children is not possible

similarly

their mistakes are unavoidable. During

these situation

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rather than

shouting

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being patient is the key.

However

, men mostly show anger but most women try not to show it which is a considerable good quality required in the child-rearing

Furthermore

when the child is in

mother's

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the mother's

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womb a bonding is formed which is present when birth takes place

this

relationship lasts long so it is necessary for a child to get attention from

mom

rather than dad in the initial stages of life.

For example

, whenever I reach home the

first

-word

spilling

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out from my mouth would be '

MOM

'. It signifies that a female is always a good babysitter To sum up, the women are patient

similarly

their melodious voice is essential when it comes to child-rearing.

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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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262 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

child-rearing
caregiver
social constructs
nurturing
gender roles
stereotypes
paternity leave
co-parenting
development
economic pressures
primary caregiver
gender biases
fluidity of roles
societal norms
inherent differences

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Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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