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Some people want the government to spend more money for looking for life on other planets however, others think it is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth that the government should be solving. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #life #planets #waste #earth
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Few
people
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 think the
government
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 should be allocating more budget for exploring
life
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 on other planets but others think that it is better to spend public money on solving
earth
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's
problems
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. As far as I am concerned the
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 group have a better point due to the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs. Researchers strongly believe that the human lifestyle makes a contribution to destroying the
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. In
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 some issues like global complications, greenhouse effects, and environmental
problems
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 are harmful to
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 situation.
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, a group of
people
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 firmly believe that the
government
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 takes drastic steps to solve the
problems
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. It seems that one of the solutions might be finding
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 other planets and after that moving there. There is no denying the fact that, from pole to pole, we have a lot of
problems
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 on the
earth
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 which should be solved by the
government
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. These
problems
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 have a major role in the quality of
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`s
life
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.
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 other
people
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 think it is better to spend public money on
earth
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 issues and make it a better place to live. Without a shadow of
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earth
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 is dotted with
problems
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 so it causes too many reasons for the
government
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 to ignore extraterritorial projects but it seems to me that we shouldn`t sacrifice our future for the current situation. In
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 regard having plans and prioritizing issues exert a positive effect on managing the budget. So solving
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's
problems
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 has more priority than the other activities so it must have more budget. Undoubtedly, looking for
life
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 on other planets brings great benefits to
people
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's future
life
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 so some
people
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 think the
government
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 should spend more money on exploring projects and others want the
government
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 to pay more attention to
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earth's
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problems
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 than other projects. I and the
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 group are of the same opinion about
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 issue.
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 I think the
government
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 should be solving
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earth's
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problems
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • extraterrestrial
  • terrestrial issues
  • poverty alleviation
  • sustainable
  • philosophical advancement
  • ethics
  • biological diversity
  • technological breakthroughs
  • resource allocation
  • fiscal responsibility
  • humanity's place in the universe
  • pressing issues
  • critical resources
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