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The given line graph illustrates the
number
of births and deaths that occurred and will be during two centuries from 1901 to 2101 in New Zealand. Overall, it is clearly shown that the Death rate was low at the beginning of the period and gradually increased by the middle of the given time and it is predicted to soar dramatically up,
then
remain stable. While the Birth rate was actually higher in comparison with the Death rate and experienced a
number
of fluctuations,
however
by the end of the period it is likely to decrease slowly. In 1901, the death
number
was almost ten
thousand
and it had continued increasing insensibly during the
first
100 years before it had a drastic rise. In the following years, to be more precisely in 2060, it will reach its peak, which is about sixty
thousand
deaths in a year, and remain the same until the twenty-
second
century. Whilst, In the early nineteen-century
number
of ,births were approximately 20
thousand
and was not stable til the 2000s and reached its highest index in 1961, with more than 64
thousand
births a year.
However
there was decay in 1981 about half a hundred
thousand
,
then
soared up again during the following decade. From the
second
,millennium ut stayed stable, so it is expected to have a slow decrease til 2101.
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