Today, the lifespan of people is much higher than before. Some people think that older people should continue to be involved in the workforce. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
no doubt, some
people
believe that old people
should Correct your spelling
continue
continiue
at Correct your spelling
continue
workplace
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the workplace
instead
of Correct your spelling
retirement
retirment
due to Correct your spelling
retirement
increasing
average life Correct article usage
the increasing
expactancy
. I personally disagree with Correct your spelling
expectancy
this
statement , because decreasing
capability of older Add an article
the decreasing
people
to handle challenging work
situations and in addition
less
job vacancies for today's youngsters.
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apply
to begin
with main
reason why old aged Add an article
the main
people
should retired
from the Change the verb form
retire
workplace
is that Correct your spelling
senior
seniour
citizens are unable to Correct your spelling
senior
coorporate
with difficult situations at Correct your spelling
cooperate
workplace
because of their declining health status day by day.Add an article
the workplace
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Moreover
Morover
,nowadays every individual need to stay active in order to make a reputation at Correct your spelling
Moreover
workplace
in Correct article usage
the workplace
this
world of competition.For instance
,in developed countries especially in America,they
retired their older citizens at the age of 60. Since Correct pronoun usage
apply
they
aware Add a verb
arethey
werethey
about
Change preposition
of
ability
Add an article
the ability
of
not Change preposition
to
doing
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do
work
in a given period of time or due to their inatentiveness
, Correct your spelling
inattentiveness
however
it would Add the comma(s)
,however
be affect
to Change the verb form
be affected
Add an article
the company
a company
company
from achieving success.
Change noun form
company's
In addition
,another contributing factor is already less
job opportunities for youngsters. If old Change the quantifier
fewer
people
remain at work place
often their limit of age. it would Correct your spelling
workplace
be
lead to Unnecessary verb
apply
issue
of unemployment among individuals.Add an article
the issue
Nevertheless
, as
a recent survey conducted by the times of America Change preposition
apply
which
revealed that about 50% unemployment rate has increased due to allowing old Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
to work
at job places,which decreased opportunities for adults.Thus
,older people
retirement is necessary to provide opportunities to youngsters.
In conclusion,the old citizens Change noun form
people's
allow
Change the form of the verb
allowed
to
Change the verb form
working
work
after the age of retirement is not an
appropriate for the Change the article
apply
workplace
in terms of dropping health and less
Change the quantifier
fewer
Correct your spelling
opportunities
oportunities
for adults.Correct your spelling
opportunities
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