Today, the lifespan of people is much higher than before. Some people think that older people should continue to be involved in the workforce. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
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the decreasing
people
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situations and in addition
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workplace
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cooperate
workplace
because of their declining health status day by day.Add an article
the workplace
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Moreover
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in Correct article usage
the workplace
this
world of competition.For instance
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work
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the company
a company
company
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In addition
,another contributing factor is already less
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fewer
people
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often their limit of age. it would Correct your spelling
workplace
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issue
of unemployment among individuals.Add an article
the issue
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revealed that about 50% unemployment rate has increased due to allowing old Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
to work
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work
after the age of retirement is not an
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workplace
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fewer
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opportunities
oportunities
for adults.Correct your spelling
opportunities
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