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What are some of the factors in modern society that causes this stress and how we can reduce it?

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The graph depicts the
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 of
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 which were shut down and opened throughout the
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 in question, from 2011 to 2018. what is clear from the graph is that almost an equal
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 of
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 opened and shut down during 2014, with
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 that closed
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 declining rapidly.
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, fluctuations in the
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 of new
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 were not as dynamic as that of the closed
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. As of the
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 half of the
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, the
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 of new
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 declined sharply from almost 8,500 to 4000, while
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 of closed
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 was almost levelling off at 6000. Following
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, both experienced a static increase
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, while the latter
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 declined to 4000. In the
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, closed
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 witnessed a sharp decline in 2015, the highest plunge in the
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, and
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 bounced back quickly in the following year, reaching 5000 units approximately. The closed
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 saw a marginal decline in 2015 before
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 levelled off for 3 years at roughly 4000 units.
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