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One problem face by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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With the globalization of the modern world, especially, very big cities are facing the main problem of
traffic
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 congestion.In my opinion, the centralization of
authority
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 and
opportunities
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 is the main reason for the huge
traffic
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 problem.In
this
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 essay,I will discuss the main causes and try to give the best solution for
this
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 problem.
To begin
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 with,the main reason for heavy
traffic
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 is the increasing population in the
city
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 area,If all
opportunities
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 are centralized in the
city
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 , the public would come for good education and job
opportunities
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.
Moreover
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,many
people
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 always want to live a comfortable life, and they always looking for live quality of life which is the cause
people
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 flow to a
city
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 full of
opportunities
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.Another reason is the increasing no of
vehicles
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.Nowadays many
people
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 have a private car,they love to drive themself because of easy and convenient for them.
furthermore
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,
vehicles
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 are increasing day by day but the road is in the same condition.
On the other hand
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,it is the reality that both the causes and solution are the two sides of the same coin which run in parallel.
Firstly
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,decentralization of
authority
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 and
opportunities
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.If
people
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 feel happy where they live,they will not need to move to urban areas.They get good education and job in their village or where they live why should they go to the
city
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?
Secondly
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,Increase tax on private
vehicles
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 and provide good easy public
vehicles
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.
Authority
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 provides a convenient and easy way to use the public transport system and
also
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 runs awareness camps for the public. In conclusion,I strongly support the main solution to
traffic
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 jams is the decentralization of
authority
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 and
opportunities
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.Because of a searching better life,
people
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 migrate to the
city
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 from
a rural areas
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rural areas
a rural area
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