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One problem face by almost every larger city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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With the globalization of the modern world, especially, very big cities are facing the main problem of
traffic
 congestion.In my opinion, the centralization of
authority
 and
opportunities
 is the main reason for the huge
traffic
 problem.In
this
 essay,I will discuss the main causes and try to give the best solution for
this
 problem.
To begin
 with,the main reason for heavy
traffic
 is the increasing population in the
city
 area,If all
opportunities
 are centralized in the
city
 , the public would come for good education and job
opportunities
.
Moreover
,many
people
 always want to live a comfortable life, and they always looking for live quality of life which is the cause
people
 flow to a
city
 full of
opportunities
.Another reason is the increasing no of
vehicles
.Nowadays many
people
 have a private car,they love to drive themself because of easy and convenient for them.
furthermore
,
vehicles
 are increasing day by day but the road is in the same condition.
On the other hand
,it is the reality that both the causes and solution are the two sides of the same coin which run in parallel.
Firstly
,decentralization of
authority
 and
opportunities
.If
people
 feel happy where they live,they will not need to move to urban areas.They get good education and job in their village or where they live why should they go to the
city
?
Secondly
,Increase tax on private
vehicles
 and provide good easy public
vehicles
.
Authority
 provides a convenient and easy way to use the public transport system and
also
 runs awareness camps for the public. In conclusion,I strongly support the main solution to
traffic
 jams is the decentralization of
authority
 and
opportunities
.Because of a searching better life,
people
 migrate to the
city
 from
a rural areas
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rural areas
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